(NaPoWrimo Day#7)
Tears freeze to scarred skin
In the harsh Nor’easter wind
Ankles sink to sand as
Waves grasp at heavy heelsFive years have past now
A car wreck but a shadow
In shallow memory of time
In one man’s mindPerhaps the cold can tell
The account of that night
Laying in mangled car
Rocking in icy streamArms outstretch for answers
Eyes look up to heaven
Legs shake in cold and pain
Voice cries out in anguishRemembrance blows away
In the wind remains silence
The mind races still
The body falls to bent kneeTears freeze to scarred skin
In the harsh Nor’easter wind
Intense.
What do you think is the most powerful line of the poem Will? is there a way to end on that line?
thom
April 8th, 2008
Thom, I like: “In the wind remains silence”
I could see how ending there could possibly make a more complete piece. What are your thoughts?
Will
April 8th, 2008